Kain this is really well written and dramatic. BUT it is full of spelling and formatting errors (eg you don't need 'says' in the parentheses, and you keep forgetting to capitaslise character names in the scene directions). You are potentially a really interesting creator of dialogue but you need to take more care with presentation.
Kain this is really well written and dramatic. BUT it is full of spelling and formatting errors (eg you don't need 'says' in the parentheses, and you keep forgetting to capitaslise character names in the scene directions). You are potentially a really interesting creator of dialogue but you need to take more care with presentation.
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