Again very lively writing and some great moments (along with some duffers - I really don't think you have done a good job with the boy telling his dad he's gay - it stereotypical and has little subtext). BUT you MUST proofread - go back through it now and see how many errors you can spot - both in spelling and punctuation, AND in layout conventions. The writing is worthy of a Merit but the errors keep it lower.
Again very lively writing and some great moments (along with some duffers - I really don't think you have done a good job with the boy telling his dad he's gay - it stereotypical and has little subtext). BUT you MUST proofread - go back through it now and see how many errors you can spot - both in spelling and punctuation, AND in layout conventions. The writing is worthy of a Merit but the errors keep it lower.
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